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Undetainable Love by =divisal:icondivisal:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional


You don't call here
like you used to.

I miss the hours on end
we'd spend
talking about everything
and nothing at all.

Awaiting your phone calls
became a thing of the past,
but I can't stop thinking
about us.

What we could have been?

If we would have been?

I haven't touched you in years,
but I visit you
everyday in my thoughts,
holding on to the hope
that one day
you'll find me
and it will be as if
we never parted...
holding each others thoughts
in our own minds.
©2003-2009 =divisal
:icondivisal:

Author's Comments

sry about the deletion on this, ~ canasian..i clicked it by accident...now if i can only remember what i put as the description..

ok..this poem is unfinished because its about an old love that never really got its chance to live..i can't really go into details..nothing current about this one..its an an old poem...

don't really like it this much..but i thought i'd post it anyhow...

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:iconcanasian:
~canasian Sep 8, 2003, 8:56:01 PM
yummy yummy poem

repetition: how do you know what i think! are you my conscience? o_O

:+fav:
*somewhat different comment than earlier... but the gist of it... =P *

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Brilliant eyes and tender mouth. He can break your bones or break your heart.
~Llywelyn
:icondivisal:
=divisal Sep 8, 2003, 8:57:37 PM
:hug:..thnx for being patient..and thnx for the comment and the fave...:hug: again

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''That which we manifest is before us...''
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~randomsurprise Sep 8, 2003, 9:06:42 PM
Beautiful. Very touching, you did a great job bringing out feeling.
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~4got10 Sep 8, 2003, 9:07:07 PM
gee how do i say it brings back bad memories of my ex, but since you wrote it i don't have to post mine now. the door is locked to me for her so there on coming back. :clap: siamese indeed.

:D 4got10
:icondivisal:
=divisal Sep 8, 2003, 9:10:44 PM
hee hee..you can still submit yours..i'd like to read it..thnx for the comment tho..:hug:

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''That which we manifest is before us...''
:icondivisal:
=divisal Sep 8, 2003, 9:13:37 PM
thnk you so much..its another one of the poems that i thought would flop..lol..maybe i should think that of ALL of my poems, just so they get good reviews..lol..jk..thnx again..:hug:

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''That which we manifest is before us...''
:iconfila:
~fila Sep 8, 2003, 9:58:32 PM
That is so sad :( Very well written :)
:icondivisal:
=divisal Sep 8, 2003, 9:59:38 PM
thnx a lot..:hug:

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''That which we manifest is before us...''
:iconradius86:
~radius86 Sep 9, 2003, 3:23:50 AM
dude, thats awesome. you should've submitted it when you first wrote it. good job:)

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trevor
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~onegurlrevolution Sep 9, 2003, 5:15:28 AM
Cathy... you keep impressing me Rock on baby...rock on!! ;) :hug: me luvs u!!

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I don't want your hand this time I'll save myself. Maybe I'll wake up for once
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